Analyses of Peers' Papers (#3)

Amy Plastow's:
1 .What is the claim?
a. Recycling is important.
b.Thesis is clearly stated in final sentence of introduction.

2.What support does the writer offer for the claim?
a. Supportive reasons are: It will postpone Earth's "end" by reducing greenhouse gas emissions, it will save resources.
b.Evidence: Recycling reduces pollution output (Conserve Energy Future).  2,400 pounds less CO2 is put into the atmosphere if you recycle half your annual recyclables (Brennon).  Buring waste puts off a lot of CO2 and CFC (CEF).  One of the author's friends says that in Connecticut there are machines that will give you a receipt with money for aluminum cans.
c. I find these reasons plausible and sufficient.

3. How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?
a. Counterarguements are considered and refuted with more evidence.
b. One is plain refuted the other is given a considered response full of cited evidence.
c.The counterarguements are treated respectfully with a tad of dismission for the "global warming is a myth" idea.
d.The author works more in specifics then generalizations.

4. What authorities or sources of outside information does the writer use?
a. Cited sources are used to emphasize points where applicable and as the bodies of paragraphs in other areas.
b.Most of them are credible though the personal interview is of course questionable, people are inately flawed and our language is given to miscommunication, that said this particular quote is likely a secure primary source.
c. I don't know if they are current, besides the interview which was this year, as no copyright is provided.

5. How does the writer address you as the reader?
a.The writer does not assume readers will know anything about the topic at hand.
b. The writing is inclusive of the reader.
c. I share the authors beliefs that recycling is important and related to global warming.

Emily Fletcher's:
1. What is the claim?
a. The main point is that art should be kept in school.
b. Clearly stated thesis in final sentence of intro.

2. What support does the writer offer for the claim?
a. Reasons: art promotes brain development and a balanced person/life.
b. Evidence, facts and statistics
c. Reasons plausible and sufficient.

3. How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?
a. Counterarguments are considered.
b. Opposing positions are considered and lead into facts with all the backing of fully acclaimed credible sources and logos appealing solutions.
c. Other arguments are are treated reasonably and squashed firmly.  If a higher word count was allowed more time could be profitably spent on them.
d. I saw no sign of excessive sweeping generalizations.

4. What authorities or sources of outside information does the writer use?
a. Cited sources are used both to refute counter arguments and to support the author's position.
b. I find the sources credible though the one from the fine arts division is suspect to bias.
c. The oldest source with a date shown is from 2009.  Therefore I consider them current.

5. How does the writer address you as the reader?
a. I do not believe that the writer makes unreasonable assumptions and she certainly provides enough information to inform her readers of the situation, barring lack of evidence that this is a real problem, that could be considered an assumption of reader knowledge.
b. I do not recall any inclusive language.
c. I do share the author's position on this topic.  Though I have no personal knowledge of the problem.  Art should be kept in schools.